A very long time ago, (seems like a 100 years), I was young… and I was in love. No surprise? Ok I was in love again… But this time (like every other frikkin time) it felt real and it felt that it’ll last forever…
And then one day, it seemed that it might suddenly end… Again! I was heartbroken for the umm… (don’t remember how many so I’ll just say) umpteenth time. And in that moment, I wrote this…
You’re not indispensible…
Seeing you walking out the door
I felt a feeling I can’t describe
There was so much pain and agony
But all that I tried to hide
But a fear still exists in my mind;
What if you walk out of my life?
What if our ways part?
What if to our wishes God turns blind?
What if you take back your heart?
When you were gone, I felt so lonely
So incomplete, and so …
I don’t know
I wish this never happens to our life
Forgetting you is out of question
Coz. If I cut you off, I’d cut myself with the same damn knife.
Words could never express how much I love you
Or when I’m with you, What I feel
If there was some place like heaven
There I’ve already been.
I’ve tried to explain
I had to try
“No one’s indispensable”
Here doesn’t apply.
“A life without you”
The only thought makes me cold and numb
I can’t hide, I can’t run
I’m at a pointWhere I believe, it’s YOU or NO ONE.
And those were the days when internet had just begun so I posted this on a poetry library website – http://www.lovingyou.com. I never knew that centuries later, when I google my name, this might just pop up.
Though I’m so over it, (yes, I do at least remember which girl who I wrote this for) and a tad embarrassed on this disclosure but I thought I’ll show off my softer poetic side :-).
Moral of the story: Be careful what you post on the internet!
hehehehhe 🙂
really cute!
Nice. I like the part where you speak about the knife! 😉
Talk about electronic footprints one leaves along the way! But good for some reason that they serve as pointed reminders for somethings that we have matured as a result of!
softer side ???
lol… we all want to show that… but we need coaxing our selves… dont we ??
Rakesh and its Swats on top not me… so I m sure you breathing a sigh of relief… !!!!! lol….
@Swats: See this is what I wanted to hear – "Cute" 🙂
@Masood: Somehow now that part seems good to me as well!
@Rakesh: Matured? I'm not sure about that…
@Dhiren: Yeah – And that too for two posts consecutive 🙂 he he
That was sweet…
Anyway, Moral of the story: Be careful what you post on the internet!… for this I'd say, you can always use a pseudonym 🙂
I refuse to believe you wrote this.
T.
@Terra: But I want to be famous as well…
@Tricia: Why? See, that's why I put up this post 🙂
I like it!
Nice.
Wowdi…Mera Bhai Poet.. Meri aane wali film ka lyrics writer.. Haha…
I too have written a couple of them when in love n all eons ago, but in diary n all which is kept somewhere but I am sure if ever I open some old boxes n find that diary n read those 'couple of them', I ll be tad embarrassed… especially after reading urs.. 🙂 mine wud like a nursery rhyme
Did u show this to the girl for whom u wrote it ????
oh God! really? That's you? Very nice Rakesh. i am pleasantly surprised. Hope the wife doesn't mind. 😉
@Neha: Tks 🙂
@Vee: What? Film? Sirji Ek Chance… he he Find them Vee – they'll sound nice now when you're over it…
@Varunavi: Unfortunately or Fortunately, NO
@GM: The wife doesn't mind whatever happened before she came into my life. Actually, even I'd forgotten about this one.
@Varunavi: Same question again?
i came here to check what u replied to my comment and i didnt see my comment and then i wrote again and refreshed it and saw twice my comment has appeared.
awww…this is so sweet :))))
LOL@Masood's comment 😀
Though I’m so over it, (yes, I do at least remember which girl who I wrote this for)
ha!ha!thank gawd you do! 😛
and a tad embarrassed on this disclosure but I thought I’ll show off my softer poetic side :-).
haan!that toh I can see…softer more mushier side:))))
good work!
I think it was all practice for wifey:)))
how to 'woo ' 😀
seriously this is cute 🙂
the awwww kinda poem:D
Wha?!!!! You wrote that?
Good one, Rakesh.
Any belan or other kind of attacks from wife after publishing this post? :)))
@Varunavi: Yeah, I guessed that…
@Indy: Exactly the point of this post 🙂
@Solilo: My wife doesn't read my blog 🙂 But I guess she knows, I was (and am) an eternal romantic!!!
The Love Song of Rakesh. Not bad. Look at all the drama: agony, pain knife, you or no one. Dard bhara geet!
🙂
@Vee: I think that is a very good idea…lyrics writer. Actually, lyrics writer cum hero!
Cheers,
Quirky Indian
@Quirky: Quirky Sir, Abhi aap Vee ke saath taang kheechoge kya?
On second thoughts, Vee would most probably make a film festival kinda movie where the hero or rather the protagonist would undergo hell and would be a scary looking rickshawwala! he he, In that case, I'll give it a pass…
Rakesh,
Now that poem was much better than a nursery rhyme. Seriously!
And yes, I agree with the pseudonym idea.
And good you didn't try to make her read your poem. When I'd tried to make some other 'her' read my poem ('Desert-river in a sinister spring', which is also coincidentally on my blog), I'd to tell her that she herself was the subject of the poem! Well, it was a semi-breakup–that half being mine; she'd never really committed, and I was actually relieved to leave her for good, after realizing how dumb she was! 'cuz after reading the poem all she'd managed to say was–'it's good!' lol.
Nice post!
TC.
PS: I use cell phone to browse through blogs, and your with all those pics is very heavy. Still, I'll try be more regular here. 🙂 I've always liked your humor.
U know …. Good that U posted it … It gives a hope .. today it might seem that it is end of world but tomorrow we won't even remember the world that ended …
@Ketan: Yeah, I know what you mean… Its so frustrating at times to see your dream girl turn out to be dumb! What is it with these pretty girls? lol…
@Lubna: Yeah, at that time, I really thought it was Her or No One! Sounds almost funny now.
cute 🙂
Rakesh, you are really really good at poetry!! Do try your hand at some more 🙂
@Saima: Tks 🙂
@Smitha: I would, but my present girlfriend (wife) hardly goes even to my inlaws house 🙂 lol…
the ability of certain hearts to make and break, make and break, and yet more make and break… is amazing.. 🙂
and no, i dont mean that sarcastically
@Aswathy: Blame it on the potion that women bring into my lives… the potion heals my broken heart in no time 😉
LOL Must email it to my son 😉 With warning of what Rakesh Vanamali says about electronic footprints 😉 And I so agree about the knife part with Masood… but all jokes aside I think this is really so typical teenage sweet 🙂
I'd say a neat piece of poetic outburst this! 🙂
@IHM: Wish we could be teenagers forever… Always in love but never married 😛
@Shail: It was exactly that – an outburst…